Monday, August 24, 2015

Beautiful Chaos Comments

Rating: 4.5

Tears stain her cheeks
While he holds her close,
His arms wrapped around her,
As though to prevent the world from crashing down,
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Jessica Gabanyic
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R B Seals 25 February 2016

Awesome! I loved the image of the male shielding her from the ravages of the world; and your use of descriptive phrases that touch on the immediate events as a world crashing down, tear-stained cheeks, a body wracked, and a heart shattered. All individual in nature, but put together nicely to form a story in poetic form that easily ignites the reader's imagination. Truly a reading I enjoyed, Jessica...thank you! [Rating: 9]

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