Thursday, August 30, 2012

Beach Girl Comments

Rating: 5.0

She walked so slowly along the sand,
Carrying sea shells in her hand,
Ithought i heard a mermaid sigh,
As this beauty tripped on bye,
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bilbo reid
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Clarence Prince 24 June 2013

Nice work Billy, I like it! Blessings to you!

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James Urwin 10 February 2013

I loved it to...The rhyme is good and flows well...ends good aswell....I hope your other poems ryhme because I cant find many on this site that do, and they are the only ones that I personaly enjoy and find talent in.Keep up the good work :)

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Adeline Foster 09 September 2012

Loved it. But she surely was not a 'witch'. I think you meant to say 'which' in line 2 of the last verse. Read mine - Storm Song - Adeline

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Joseph Anderson 08 September 2012

Real or imagined you did a great job telling us. I sure wish to see that painting-a smooth and sweetly flowing write

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Heather Wilson 30 August 2012

Lovely poem, brilliant finish, she was not an appartion after all, loved it.

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Chris Blazo 30 August 2012

Great mental pictures drawn here. We always want beauty to last. Great write!

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Dawn Ferrett 30 August 2012

Sweet memory, or just a dream! Either way it makes for a lovely poem! ! ! I really enjoyed reading it! Dawn xx

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