Thursday, February 1, 2007

Beach Comments

Rating: 4.3

As I walk along the deserted beach
I feel the damp sand surronding my feet
I feel the cool relaxing breeze creep up upon me with ease
As I look out at the restless waves my thoughts unwind like restless days
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Eleanor Bruner 04 May 2021

I love it. Couldn't of written anything better! !

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hello 15 May 2018

Surrounding is spelt wrong

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Anil Kumar 14 April 2011

I like the way you wrote the poem.One thought continuously perceiving the other thoughts aroused.Comparing the continuous flow of thoughts with continuous fluctuations and variations of sea water.Nice poem

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Eyan Desir 17 January 2010

good write well expresss....

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Joseph Poewhit 02 November 2009

Captures the shoreline well.

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Very calm and serene. Inspiring tranquility.

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Allemagne Roßmann 11 August 2009

Solitude and introspection going side by side...do read my Flowers of Love and When i Think about you which has the similar impact.10 voted for you

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Samanyan Lakshminarayanan 10 August 2009

true it is a moving and rhythimic place roaring load yet it gives peace we feel one with it...lovely short poem

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M.j. Daniels 29 July 2009

That's a really good poem i like it

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Cat Tiger 24 July 2009

There is a hint of ONOMATOPOEIA in your verse. 'The sand surrounding my feet' begs the lines 'and creeping up through my toes.' Creep, however, doesn't work with breeze and ease. Also 'surrounding' is misspelled. Nice effort though, for a girl of 17. ~Cat

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Jasmine Wayne 18 July 2009

Beautifully descriptive poem, brings back vivid memories quite well.

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Keith Hendrickson 07 July 2009

'as i look out at the restless waves my thoughts unwind like restless days' very very good line. short and sweet does it sometimes. great piece

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Les Derbyshire 02 July 2009

This is my introduction to your work and it makes me want to go and read the others now! This concise little piece is nicely expressive and in one sense leaves the reader wanting more. But I feel that you are right to make it as short as you have, it adds to its effectiveness rather than detracting from it.

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C. P. Sharma 17 May 2009

We all are in search of our beaches in desrts. CP

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Jessica Caswell 17 May 2009

even though its short, you can tell the beauty of the beach... love it 10++

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Poetic Kadri 08 May 2009

I love it. It brings out the calm side of people...

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Arabian Heart 20 August 2008

very calming through my eyes such a delight to be in paradise in fears can be so tames and watch all your troubles float away in the waves a beautiful place in which you are or see please write more for me

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DELETED NOW 19 May 2008

this poem explains how people can make a place livley and happy when no one is at the beach it can be relaxing but when people r there it's very fun and exciting....

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~A Little Blue Bird~ 14 April 2008

wow that gives you a PERFECT picture in your mind! Niceeeeee!

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Shelley L Baxter-stanley 14 April 2007

'Shiny shine'... first of all your poet name is Kool! Second I love anything to do with water, lakes, beaches...waterfalls so I had to read your beach poem. Short and sweet! I could feel the sand beneath my feet and the lonliness of the beach...and yet I felt a calm and peace as the breeze blew by me... Thanx for sharing.I needed an escape and I enjoyed your imagery tremendously. Great job.please keep sharing. =Shelley=

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