Saturday, May 16, 2009

... Be Strong Comments

Rating: 5.0

Life's monstrosities
Keeps head above water
Mouth's fight to eat bread
Wolves dress in sheep's clothing
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Eyan Desir
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yellowbell alamanda 09 October 2009

very inspiring... you realy had thre gift in those simple words, no need to dig on my thick dictionary its simple to understand and easy to feed the mind! great!

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Angel's lyre 09 June 2009

........The hands of God Man will learn to be strong nice! ! ! ! ! The God is really our strength. Be strong and blessed! !

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DELETED NOW 01 June 2009

determination is success.... here's my favorite line...Blow your nose, not your mind

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Howard Kern 31 May 2009

give yourself a 10+++ It has the inference of a traditional Haiku that hangs in the mind for a lot longer than three lines. the 'mouth' s fight to eat the bread' along with the, ' Vultures that make more bread' compeling lines for mind's that find the, 'mana of life' is in the messages, emotions, and feelings conveyed in poetry. nice job! ! !

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Obed Souza 31 May 2009

Dear poet, Difficult times reveal our characters. Hard times is a solid ground where miracles can be forged, hope can abound and life prove itself beyond our expectations. There´s a always a blessing disguised as despair and suffering... Nice doing! Thanks for sharing.

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Ty Robertson 31 May 2009

Nicely written. The theme is very fitting for our current times, and others to be sure. It truly did spark some thought. Thanks for the write, Ty Robertson

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Rajaram Ramachandran 30 May 2009

A coward dies many a death, while a brave man dies once-this poem proves this saying.

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Harley Marie 30 May 2009

very powerful write my dear poet. very sacrificial. great explanations too. and good description as well.

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Pandian Angelina 30 May 2009

Your first stanze brought pictures of Refugees lining up for their bread and Betrayal, Politicians - the metaphor so apt, wolves in sheep's clothing. What to say - are we fools to trust or or they wiser, to take advantage of our goodness and trusting spirit, With GOd's help I'd rather be a Fool! Thanks for a stirring and inspiring poem, Eyan. Angel

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Tyrone Wingfield 29 May 2009

short but unimaginably powerful, you are a truly gifted poet

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Nangula Immanuel 29 May 2009

True! With God we can over come all. Nice one! ! !

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Saadat Tahir 29 May 2009

yes indeed some we deem friends...turn out to be vultures great lines...thanx cheers

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Kafil Uddin Raihan 29 May 2009

That's really hot.......against these we all should arise our voice

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Vinod Ak 29 May 2009

splendid! very inspiring poem!

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Kesav Easwaran 23 May 2009

good message...good advice...inspiring voice yours...10

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Noha El3wdy 23 May 2009

strength is what we need to survive, lives only the brave in the zoo-world we are in. impressive

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Naidz Ladia 16 May 2009

Life's monstrosities Keeps head above water ''Mouth's fight to eat bread Wolfs dress in sheep's clothing Sell many friends As vultures they await To eat innocent flesh To make extra bread''...i quote this first stanza....dear, this is truly happening....so, always mindset...a very expressive poem...naizz

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a very wise write...god's hand should keep us strong

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