Basho's Haiku Comments

Dick Sanders, My haiku are a variation of a major theme.Have you read the other poet's interpretation? -there are 30 plus interpretations of Basho's Old Pond and Frog haiku on line.Also I have seen a pop art and cartoonish version of the Mona Lisa.The originals will always be admired but the beholder interprets their own reality based on impression. Using the basic elements of his haiku and applying my own powers of observation I gave Basho and the modern day reader an answer to what happens when the frogs are under water and why do they jump in the first place.I have no idea if Basho could spend time underwater in the 1600s when he lived and wrote this most challenging and inspiring work but he certainly leaves a very long and impressive gift of the haiku style poetry to the poets of this world to imitate. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my hard work.

Hi Lorraine You asked me for my opinion. To be honest with you, your versions don't excite my sensibilities. I am sorry if this offends as I do not mean to. But you did ask. Basho's original was evocative. I find your haikus to be descriptive. You were game to try though. I wouldn't have. To me it would be like trying to repaint the Mona Lisa. Regards Dick

i like all of them... Great poems

I love Haiku form How the can be so beautifully done. You have accomplished that with this one