Bang Comments

Actually in juxtaposition to the previous comment....I like the ending...had you not ended with done....the reader basically would have formatted an ending to the poem...with it you have reinvented the ending to be one of mystery....

I'm curious as to why you wrote the word 'Done' at the end. I really don't see the need for it. I thought the previous words were a good ending to this piece. There is not much else to note here. It does create interest, but there is no real substance to cling to here. I guess that was the intent. GW62

I love the way this sounds like just so exciting and violent..excellent poem -Tyease