Awful Flaw Comments

Apart from too much punctuation in this, it's quite a good poem, or could be. loose a lot of the comma's exclamation marks, write it as if speaking it, with every pause a new line and it will work much better for you and the reader. I agree though that the real thing has Flaws for sure and this world is obsessed about perfecting the already perfectly flawed individual call human. A thought provoker. Smiling at you, Tai