Awakening Comments

down flowing river eloping with sea i like these words. it reminds me where i came from where river intertwine with sea forming whirpool where fish feast. lovely thank you very much

Money power and muscle power are the order of the day in every country. It is the poor and middle class suffer in this ordeal. A message well brought out in the poem.

a strong inspiring message shared here

this is a good write with flow...nice

when the tough gets going, the going get tough......nice write pal

A lovely poem Rohan, it is flowing with ease. thanks

Nice piece of poetry. Thanks sharing. I really enjoyed it. Good Luck. Kolitha

I believe the title doesn't need the word youth. 'Awakening' is just fine. GW62

I can relate to this...I see it as you saying to a young person. 'Awake and know that there is a future. Don't let the wonderful opportunity pass you by like a downflowing river with waves (elloping sea) .' Yes the idea of rags to riches is a wonderful moment and your emotions take you when you are on top; but if you continue to stay in poverty, or on the level you're on, the crab-like people on the same level who are not trying to succeed, will try to keep you there in their misery. Misery loves company. That is what I got from your poem. Every success begins small, and the vision came to pass because it started with a relaxed mind that was dreaming. Keep dreaming and seeing before it awakes, and you will find that it will awake everytime. So, be careful what you dream.

The last two lines 'Down flowing river elloping with sea' is really catching and conveys the meaning to awaken the youth.

I like this poem, I like the imagery that it gives, nicely done.