Sunday, May 21, 2023

Awakening Comments

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In the elegant cups painted in a style of 'gold',
Amber tea pours, giving us a pleasant warming.
But its tonic taste is spoiled by the sadness' salt,
And my drink gets more bitter with the next dawning.
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Nice poem. Albeit being served in shining colourful cups, ‘ But its taste is spoiled by the sadness' salt'…. Loved it..

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Dennis Ryan 22 May 2023

I liked your use of color and diction in this poem—I.e. "sadness' salt". Your descriptions are evocative, effective, affective.

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