Awake In The Morning Comments

Like this a lot Anand. Like the opening line' the double-adjectives giving it joy and energy; the metaphor of touch hugging, holding the air etc; and the rhythm of the end! A few bit jar - 'acute' vs 'boisterous &' 'silent noise' of the feathers, just when you've got this lovely soft tactical vibe going on. But lovely to capture that 'nearness' of the dawn tradition. Will read more.

Wow! a lovely writing. When I read this poem really I felt the beautiful nature. Thanks for your comment.Please keep reading my poems.

What you say in the final stanza is really true: most humans wake up AFTER nature's beautiful performance, and even if we would be awake we'd be too busy getting ready for work. So there is the key reason for a lyric poem like yours: it captures this natural beauty so that we can appreciate nature through literature. And your poem offers us a thorough experience of these daily wonders. In the first stanza alone, there are sight, sound and touch images, and the visual image of THE GOLDEN LINE where sun and earth meet is breathtaking. (I'm going to look for that golden line this summer!) I liked the reference to VENUS in the blue sky; she is the only figure outside of nature in the poem. Could she be the Anima figure like a daylight SARAH?

Early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy wealthy and wise so says the proverb. Here the poet proclaims the benefit of early awakening and its experience in detail which is very interesting since I am already an early rising person and taking my exercises in dawn which is very interesting. Good poem sir.

A beautiful write! I felt being there amused by the wonder around me! You are a great aspiring young poet. Keep it going!

Nice description of early morning, I don't know a poet who has not written some thing on the morning. You have nicely performed your poetic duty.

Nice description of early morning, I don't know a poet who has not written some thing on the morning. You have nicely performed your poetic duty.

Nice description of early morning, I don't know a poet who has not written some thing on the morning. You have nicely performed your poetic duty.

Nice description of early morning, I don't know a poet who has not written some thing on the morning. You have nicely performed your poetic duty.

yes, late risers never get to see the beauteous face of the morning. lovely write.

Green green grass, very fine, thanks. Please read my poems and say something.