Aulde Schole Comments

This works for me. Looks like you fixed the typo - but there is a messy freedom here that makes spelling a bit irrelevant (have I spelt that right?) . Like your use of 'plumb' as a colour in the Auschwitz verse - let it go where it will, and you get more.

Not completely coherent to me, but I like the flow and original imagery. Suggest checking for typos (e.g., unlved) before posting.