Attracted Comments

Sensuously passionate Deborah - - I like the comparison at the start of the attraction the butterfly has for the flower...... a dreamy steamy verse....10 plus from Fay

Elegance have your passionate lines here..well written poem..............10+++++

oh what a lovely........passionate........compact.......and fine wording! 10+

The world needs more poems like this... full of passion and enthusiasm.

Hurled above rhythm, hearts pound in pattern with thunderous roar Thoughts now of the next time we are together are hard to ignore it is for asking and can be had anytime but it will be very hard to ignore...10 read mine butterflies...anywhere and mary to marry

Very passionate :) And may i add Hot: D haha. Keep Writing!

this is a very steamy and passionate piece and i hope that the guy that made you feel that why knows how much he ment to you

A steamy and passionate piece Deborah with very vivid imagery. Best wishes, Andrew

Wow - many nice words but this i like Like a butterfly to a flower your movement attracts my eyes - good found words nice 10+

ooh! it's really hot in there.

I think nobody writes it better than you are. Wonderful and entertaining; -)

Strong wording...I completly love it but ppl here hate these poem... you should consider write these books, ....you know what i mean I will be the first to read you got a great flow with word your book will be a best seller forget about poems write compostions of love great job

Very sensual but not naughty.You didn't use any of the words prohibted on this site.If you have a chance please read my SPEAK OF LOVE.I thought the last two lines in my poem's 2nd stanza was too risque.I gave you a ten...

Have no worry, young lady...there is nothing you have written here that management would not consider apostolic, no less acceptable for posting here. However, if you wouldn't mind, i'd like to share a few thoughts on this piece, which i find to be commendable, and possessing potential for solid quality, with some modification! Your employment of sensual depiction is fine...but you need to leave something for the imagination. Deborah, IMO, you bare a wee bit too much...which in the case of a work with an intimate theme...you need to deliver some of your expression by way of some underlying termonology, that the Reader will get...but that does not jump out and bite them, so easily. Keep 'em thinking, and searching and they'll always come back for more...Good Luck, lass! FjR

Wow... Very nice. Vivid, moving, sensual.10+++ I just dropped some words here with the same intent. A nice nice time... I bid you Peace. 1ww