At The Edge Of My Peripherals Comments
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paean from the past
acclamation
for the lost girl
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Full of heart! .. And ever so moving! .. Thank you again for sharing this! .. Ever so very many 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ...............+++++
Thank you for reading this again- -it is one of my favorite pieces. And thank you for the starry eyed 10's! ! !
Just brilliant, Susan. You have so deftly wielded the sparseness of verbage to create powerful spaces of stunning impact between images and thoughts. Each staccato image strikes like a punch. There is an aura here, the difficult journey of life connecting past to future that is not only cathartic, but unforgettable, and I don't want to forget it. Beautifully done, Susan. Bravo.
I can't tell you how much your comment impacts me. This one came out of a different plane and to have you react to it like this is a commendation, a very valued commendation..
amen, susan. may our hearts melt where they are stony. it's a challenge, and i don't know that we can make it happen. but how good it is when it does and we have the clarity and joy it brings. nothing makes me tear up more than seeing kindness and mercy in others or in myself. it's a gift to be moved. -glen
Thank you, Glen, what a powerful comment that you have written here.
A hihgly imaginative poem having a depiction of pitiable situation with beautiful collocation. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you for reading and commenting! It pleases me that you found it a good read, my friend.
An unfortunate turn of events can place us on a difficult path to walk. Youth can be a little more forgiving of early mistakes and poor judgment yet sometimes the scarring of life can take us to the grave disappointed and regretful. A powerful poem with haunting images.
Thank you for the read and the encouraging comment, Simone. Sometimes the choices we make when young set us on a path that gets harder and harder to swerve off of onto another path.
A wish for the return of innocence and love to reach back and bring the young girl home back into your heart again! Powerful and beautiful write!
Hazel, thank you for reading this and giving me feedback on it. I hoped it would be powerful but wasn't sure about the structure of it.
People who have fallen and have been unfeeling and are now lost when come to reckon their mistakes are likely to repent and wish to get a transformation effected on them! A pitiable situation is beautifully summarized! I wonder if my reading of it is the one you intended!
Valsa, you have a sensitive soul and have sensed the young woman and the old woman are one and the same in the sense that we all look for redemption and some find it at long last in a moment of truth and humility while others are searching blindly for it and perhaps in time will find it if they open their eyes.... and maybe the old woman is the girl finally grown up.... ;)
Well, I just read this Susan...and it just left me so, so sad; Reminding me of a few I knew back in the day - that must have been completely blind - to have done the things that they did to others...and they must have all had hearts of stone...that really is the only way to describe them...one can only hope, later in life, we they have come to nothing, that finally, God will somehow erase, the they that they once were, and to give them a warm, kind, caring, loving, compassionate heart. Great write, Susan! A 10!
Bless your heart, Theo, for not wanting God to rain down condemnation but forgiveness and change on these hurtful people's heads. So, you see, through you and those warm, kind, caring, loving, compassionate hearted people.like you, compassion is taking back the world one person at a time. How about I give you a huge 10! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
who is lost! who suffers. poetic. for me this poem is completed with title plus poem plus topic.. souls. souls can wrap time and space
Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. I like to have titles grab the readers' attention- -get the senses perked up, the mind on seek and employ mode!
Excellent imagery. A great flow n rhythm to the words. It's going to my favorites' list so i could return to it again. A soulful write. A perfect 10.
Oh, thank you, Nosheen, it is so encouraging to hear when you like a poem so much you want to read it again and again... makes me feel I did my job right! ! ! Getting flashes of imagery to carry the emotional atmosphere was a bit difficult but satisfying. Thank you for the 10, my friend!
I agree with MJ . It has an authentic feel of a Dylan song with a very subtle rhythm. I'll put it in my favourites to remind me to read it again and again. One of your best, Sue!
Hey, Tom, friend of Mr. Purry. That is such a WoW comment! ! ! I thank you, kind sir, for putting it where you can read it again and again :)
Stunning imagery, Susan. There's something about both the diction and the meter that screams Bob Dylan. An excellent poem; a 10.
Thank you, thank you, thank you! ! ! ! I am intrigued with what I am doing here- -and really was hoping for favorable feedback! ! ! ! I think I will try another one of these- -gee, what shall we call it? Susan's Goulash? Susan's Screaming Bob Poem? Hey, thank you for the 10 too.... Yes, I think I will do another one of these :)
Wow! ! ! ! ! From Reckoning, To Need Of Cleansing A Strong, And Powerful Message This Is Sending! ! ! ! ! Love The Way, Into The Heart This Message Does Sink, Making A Person Turn... And Think...Twice About Life...Darkness And Light.. Gratitude In The Night/s...Thank You! ! ! ! ! So Much For Sharing This! ! ! ! ! Many, Many 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
You have me smiling, Rebecca dear- - I must admit I am fond of poetic comments and this one rhymes! ! ! Your support means a lot to me- -and your 10's prop me up! ! ! ! ! !
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and in the walking dusk a homeless bag lady in a plain brown wrapper cries cleanse me take away my heart of stone.....touching expression that changes the stone heart. Great work.
I am pleased that you like this piece- this is one of my all-time favorites. I have written a number of for fun poems to amuse readers but this is my serious side. Thank you for your comment!