At Hiroshima's Rock Comments

This is not a bad poem, Dillon, but it could use some polishing. I liked your use of reptition of certain words and phrases, but It's a bit too over done. Three times would be about the max for a poem of this length. From the way this poem flows and reads, I would guess that your were still a teen when you wrote it, simply because it shows. Your last verse was the best in the poem, but dead folks don't walk. It would be better to say 'lying there by Hiroshima Rock, ' or 'Killed there by Hiroshima Rock.' Still I liked the concept of this poem and it's theme and think you have great poetic promise. Carl.

They use to throw rocks at each other one time