At 2: 39 Am Comments

Wow. Truly moving. Written with so much emotion. Very well done fellow writer. (/|\) Autumn.

You captured pain and feel very well in your poem. Got good flow and rhythm too. Unfortunately its not so moving even though you got the feel in this poem. Finally ending is not so appealing to me.

Bit of a melodrama dude...lighten up...

Kibrom, while I don't doubt the sincerety of your angst, the poem doesn't really explain your pain and sorrow. The text is full of woe and self pity but doesn't describe what it is that really pains you. Just what is it about this person that was so special? If the poem explained this, the reader might have more empathy. As it stands, the work seems overly dramatic and self centred, which I don't think does justice to your intent.

a thought ful poem and well written

This is a very interesting, powerful write. You have pulled these words from the bottom of your heart. Great write Kibrom.

deep, penetrating thoughts...heart-wrenching words and expressions.

A very nice piece of wrok. Thanks for sharing it with us. E.K.L.

the poem is scored for its feeling. i respect it. shan

Hi, a very good poem like the blood thicker than water and the life is heavier than death...keep writing..

Nice poem...Very beautiful with lot of emotions....Keep writing brother...

Nice poem that emerged that night to you. Good!

A great work of a talented guy.

I m deeply moved by the poem...very touching and calmly expresses the hidden as well as some bit pale meaning in life...wonderful and honest writing!

the poem shows the depth of talent you have to show your feeling.very nice.beautiful work.liked it.

Very poignant. Great creation!

Interesting poem to read! It surely touches heart!

Hi Kibrom... I read your poem... It is very melancholic, a feeling most of us are familiar with, where everyone at some time in their lives thought - wouldn't death be sweeter than life? Can we carry on with the burden of living, when all we have sometimes is fear... where pain is a reality and to some who understand an everyday emotion we have to deal with... Specially the 'sensitive' souls... I 'got' your poem, I understood... It is a beautiful poem with lots of potential... You are so young and at that age where everything is new and scary and real... I - as a sensitive woman - worry a little about how deep your pain lies and am glad you shared these words... As a poet I do have one criticism though, just check your spelling a little - like the word 'hear' should be here and 'under this leaves' should be these leaves... just a little thing and I hope you will take it as it is meant - with respect... I liked it a lot and I think you have rare talent... Do not stop! Good Luck and should you need any help, contact me! Kind Regards - Chantelle

Wonderful imagery! A real gift with words!

wow man thas pretty deep very heavy lotta emotion ur right writing at night is easier n in the day good stuff.