Asystole Comments

Quivering she arcs As she aims her poison dart To silence the drum Of his fibrillating heart.how meticulously and without loosing poetic sense you write my dear poetess. thank yu. tony

Sounds like the best way to go, but you sure went about telling it in a gripping way which made me felt I was moving along with she Thanks Inez

i think/'know' that V. G. and M.J. L. are reading more into this than you meant them to read. i found myself thinking back to anatomy/biology class(es) . i may not have followed the path completely, but i arrived at death for sure at the ending. sometimes a rapid/quick, relatively painless death is better than living. it sure beats (no pun originally-intended) the heck out of a lingering, painful death! ! ! i'll take death by heart attack gladly, but PLEASE no debilitating attack for me! Thank You. i like the alliterations. bri :)

Oh. My. Word. Your talent hasn't any boundaries. You combine your medical knowledge of the human body with your observations on life and on different personalities and your huge word bank and stir with that special note in your voice and you come up with these incredible poems. This should be poem of the day- -as so many of your poems should be- - and it is on my fav list along with so many of your poems and I give it a 10 but it deserves a billion. Awesome, Simone. Utterly awesome.

Anatomical words with physiological imagery, they birth in a modern poetry, and its yours! this is amazing Simone, loved it

She surges in the vein with blood pulsing in the dark. Methodically this provokes thought entirely. Deep in the atrial vault there is not too far to go speeding. An amazing poem is very well drafted on death topic and about deep observation of heart. This brings emotion. Excellent drafting! ...10

Asystole.... I am familiar with this condition of the heart as I have heard of it from my brother who was a Cardio thoracic Surgeon. But some other medical terms I had to google like Anaphylaxis and 'fabrillaton'..! However I know that behind the figurative meaning, this poem conveys something deeper. I feel it is the violent expression of resentment over the betrayal of love and the subsequent sense of revenge. Betrayal of any sort especially betrayal of love is unpardonable that the betrayed takes pleasure in the annihilation of the betrayer or are you referring simply to a medical condition when the person is assailed by anaphylaxis.... leading to death! I don't know if I am reading between the lines! However a profound write as ever....typical of Simone!

Death personified....this is one of the most amazing incarnations. This could be about flat lining, the medical consequences, or it can define some relationships. Where does the literal end and figurative begin? Stunning poem, Simone.