Saturday, July 17, 2010

Aspergia Comments

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Fixed eyelids
Falling gait
No gesture
Erect posture
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Vijay Sai R
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Mazwi Sedibe 18 July 2012

Good one great one, although i am battlilng to understand the tittle, oh but thats poetry i keeps you on your toes everytime in search for sense and meaning of our surroundings, this means to me you are a good write, since you can intrigger thought.love Da Maiz.w! (the victim)

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Louis Cecile 20 September 2010

Nicely structure short style of poetry. Though I think the pacing to the end could be sharper. However a good piece of work overall.

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Noura J. 30 July 2010

i really really like this :) one thing i don't like is the exclamation point at the end..idk i just feel like it takes something away from the rest of the poem. taht's just my suggestion though. again, really really good poem <3 hope to see more.

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Michael Ryan 20 July 2010

Its good, Keep writing and let our fate recreate ;)

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Katherine Cobing 20 July 2010

neatly done. :) 10= for you, my friend.

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Baru Gobira 18 July 2010

A sense of postponement of the inevitable pervades the poem. Like it. -Baru Gobira

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Dwi Utami 18 July 2010

simple tink simple god: thumb: : +80hmmm god luck.

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Kolawole Ajao 18 July 2010

Solid, straightforward poem.

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Crystal Bradley 17 July 2010

Nice, simple, and to the point. Nicely worded too. I liked it. Thanks for the read.

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Vijay Sai R

Vijay Sai R

Trichy, South India
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