Asking Comments

I like how this flowed and the truth to it. You always have to watch your back. Thanks for sharing.

seems about a sweet taker guy.. let be. this is good though.

Selfish you are, not nice Hurtful and dangerous as black ice Your direction towards evil does pull Be careful, be careful, be careful...... yees it is naked truth and one must be prrepared for it....10 read mine i m disgrace... cry not...

A wonderful piece of work Deborah, I loved the repeats in the last line that serve to bind the work together. Best wishes, Andrew

Deborah: Very well written and the rythem is great. I enjoyed, but we must be careful for what we ask. your freiend and God speed Lynn

beautifully rhymed content

it is touching.. good1

Very interesting...and good 10s

powerful poem, you chose themes as subtle and make impressive poems out of them....too good. full marks