Saturday, March 4, 2006

Ash To Ash Comments

Rating: 5.0

Hide yourself and sit and cry
you had no time to say goodbye
priorities were always there
now there's no one left to care
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Charles M Moore
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Gina Onyemaechi 11 May 2007

Touching little ditty. And thanks for your kind comment on my poem. Best wishes, Gina.

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billy bob 21 June 2006

the other comments u recieved just took the words out of my mouth.. i read sum of your other poems.. and i like your writing style.. it shows that you are an educated writer.. with deep thoguhts and emotions.. withthis poem in particular.. i commend you for it as a whole.. it shares almost a story.. at the same time it is not very long.. as others have said it shows how a person missed their chance.. and now weeps.. and mourns for another.. to undo the nothing done you could say.. just keep writing.. keep self expressing.. keep doing and being you: -) *debbie*

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Chuck Audette 13 March 2006

Powerful. Subject-wise, mood, rhymes - all perfect. Could identify with this theme too easily, I'm afraid. 10. -chuck

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Valentin Gabriel Cristea 08 March 2006

Very good flow and musicality and deep feelings.I liked it. I got nice imagery in your poem.Good job!

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Duncan Wyllie 06 March 2006

There are times when we wished we'd done more or could change an aspect of what has come before.Great Write, so much truth.Love Duncan

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Linda Ori 05 March 2006

Too bad we don't know what we have until we lose it. Then if we could just go back and do it a better way..........Always let people know how you feel so you never regret the things you didn't say. Regards, Linda

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Gina Onyemaechi 04 March 2006

The speaker says all this so ruthlessly and unmitigatingly as well...which is all part of the poem's force. Strong poem. Warm regards and a score of 10 from Gina.

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Patricia Gale 04 March 2006

Sad but yet true to some. Patricia

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Tara X 04 March 2006

it's really sad................

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Charles M Moore

Charles M Moore

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