As Their Old Age Is Just Going To Pass Comments

Wow what a great poem you have made

A noble ambition: to make the world a better place. Your words may have mistakes but they will always inspire!

The poem has a good soul.

This is a great write! ! :)

Great poem, many comments, nothing much left to say, other than good work.

The message you try to give is so lofty! If there are a handful of children around wth your frame of mind, things will brighten up! A good poem! Thumbs up! !

Thats nice to read and I think old age would be a curse in case children donot standby. DO keep writing. good work Bye mathew

You are young and yet wisdom of the old A budding poet you shall unfold A good conscience, can be bold, Many more poems to be told.

Impressive poem with good message, a worth reading, great write.

A good job...on a subject which plays on most peoples mind at one time or another....in order to help ones parents they must at least want you too, some just wont have it, fiercely independent.... there is one bit i struggle with... (Why do he do such a great sin?) im wondering if its a typo.... why does he do such a great sin... just a bit confusing...Other than that a piece of society documented....lovely.. tyvm karen

good job! U can compose more deeper than your age.I see some beautiful verses with essential rhymes. They loved you from the moment you weren't born But now, why to shout at them as a truck's horn He had a fever they got headache His mum made dishes for him with a cake. Like this sort of stanza, your ink creation is so so breathtaking.Keep it up! ! ! ! ! !

good poem, great respect for your elders, and yes what goes around comes around, keep writng.

That your have a great talent against your age is what i realized after reading your poem...Keep-it-up! !

The situation is disturbing for the society, this imbalance is not going to do any good to the society. Tremors are already there for us all to see and ponder over. The sitaution is more grim when an young 14 year old teenager starts showing concern, this I hope is an omen for things to turn for the better. An sensative issue beautifully presented...............considering the subject I can't say that I enjoyed it.

gteat work dear an excellant theme...keep writing... »so close«

Good poem for the youngs. Thanks Akanksha

well said Akansha... such profound thoughts from one so young... well done.. keep writing

very nice poem.reveals the reality awesome

A great message so beautifully written, our parents sacrifice so much for their children it should never be forgotten.

Great poem. God bless you. Parents are inestmable jewels and need to taken care and not abandoned at grey age. I enjoy this message. Thanks for sharing