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i agree with Hans n bro Romeo / keep writing

I also think that this well penned write is thought provoking with rich imagery! I really enjoyed and I can tell you honestly, it is amazing! 10+++ A great entrance into the Poetry World! Thank you for sharing and keep inspiring the World with more! God Bless You! Romeo-New; York City!

The rich use of metaphor and a little simile created these unique original images. The repetition in the third stanza moves the poem along. It rise and falls magicaly like a story line, sure dreams do. Its a masterpiece!

Not easy to interpret fast but I see it as a wonderful voyage in the dreams of a person who is elevated from his suffering by daring to imagine wonderful things at the time of sunset, and who shares his flight of ideas with you. Even without understanding the true story behind the poem, it is a pleasure to read the wonderful images you paint in this surreal masterpiece.

Broad-range imagescape and an abstractive storyline of intrigue highlights this fine verse ~FjR~

its beautiful as i always say i am no expert and not even good as you....but it is so beautiful.. i just lost myself in every movement you described feeling like i am living it live... ..thank you so much for this wonderful piece of art......love, payal

Great concept am not suprised, the words glide their own unique light, the creation of a vision within ones state of thinking is derived from every line of spontaneous writting of such, i am filled with above par zeal to have read these write, after quite a while not being around, great way to feed my thoughts and emotions, wonder! The_African_Son

a brilliant mesh of words with a stylistic concept. Weldone. It's a good one

I am old and old fashioned. Fly wild in unfathomable space. Flapping wings. Well done. Nice.

This is amazing write, the picture you shaped really beautiful..with the words selection, it just amazing...feel calm as if the dark calm i still warm like there is no harm...beautiful poem! keep it up_unwritten Soul

Hi! u r good at words. vocabulary strong. imagery good. But don't you think too much of imagery kills the central theme. Try mine. Bye S.P.

may you be blessed with more imagination and endless creativity!

Brilliant! Beautiful written, I could guess the huge happiness of one special moment of infinite unity. Those moments we feel one with the Universe. If my guess is correct, then I wonder have you written it out of memory or being in that state. Thank you for share, loved your poem!

This poem is full of imageries. I like the rhyme and the flow. Great write

nice words to deep explanation......! ! !

Very nice word play. In a word-praiseworthy.

xlent imagination, nice compose. always keep writing.

Interesting language and very descriptive. Not familiar with serenin and rosarin and it may have assisted to define these words in the Notes section to enhance the readers understanding. 

Very good imagery used here - great write.

in post modern poetry old english is not encouraged... otherwise the poem is good