Ants On Her Body ~ Comments

Enjoyed rreading your humoros poem.

Can I ANT(I) CIPATE more from this Poem, I mean wild thinking / Loud thinking in opposite direction. Very Interesting piece.

We allow people to crawl on us and then realise what they have done to us. Good Introspection poem. Metophor 'ANTS' are fabulous.

Basically, I thought the 'collar' part of the story was farfetched (also far-fetched) aka unlikely/implausable. But....so much for me cleaning the house; there is no time left. bri : )

(cont.) I had THOUGHT of a dog, stretched out on a lawn, WITH a dog collar, but....it didn't seem to fit what followed, much (if any) more than a human (as I earlier explained) . RIGHT! ! (CONT.)

(cont.) Yes, you 'said' 'lawn', but, even so, how often do 'we' see people lying, stretched out on a lawn with a COLLARed SHIRT, JACKET, SWEATER, OR BATHROBE on a warm day? 'We' see T-shirts, tank tops, undershirts, or NAKED (OR nearly-naked) bodies, RIGHT? (cont.)

(cont.) ..... and my mind formed (another use of form, a verb) an image (a 'visage' if you will) of a 'babe' [over 18] lying at least 1/2-naked on a beach, with NO COLLARs in sight. (cont.)

(cont.) I MAY have started to get seXually aroused (ok maybe not; I'm getting OLD) . I knew I'd read about a 'dainty form' 'stretched out'. (cont.)

(cont.) I MAY have started to get seXually aroused (ok maybe not; I'm getting OLD) . Z

2 HOURS? AFTER I WAS LAST HERE: Asim, Did I 'get that all wrong' aka 'did I completely MISinterpret the part about the 'collar'? ? ? Ha Ha ha, IF I did. When I read 'dainty form' with 'she' I....(cont.)

FIVE STARS FOR SURE! ! ! IT WOULD HAVE 8 IF I HAD BEEN THE POET. WELL, maybe not. bri : ) I wonder which took more time to compose: your POEM or my COMMENTS.

FINALLY, my 'finishline' has arrived; I hope I do NOT TRIP! ! 'that even on her body, ants could leave an enduring form.' What about IN her body? ! 'Form'? aka? ? ? Did 'they' leave, using permanent 'welts' an everlastsing likeness of 'ELVIS', maybe near her pelvis? ? ! ! !

STANZA 9: 'diminutive' aka 'very small', Yeah, 'tiny'. I used to think it was spelled 'diminuative' [WORNG! ] 'tale that would soon be unfurled.' VERY NICE! ! 'Tale' aka story, not 'tail', which dogs AND, I BELIEVE, a few humans have have,

(cont.) STANZA 7, line 2: I 'suggest': ...'like never before, being indiscreet.' STANZA 8: I guess (I really do guess) that 'vestige' aka 'visible trace' refers to the ants. It is good you had 'vestige' available for 'face'. ;) bravo! !

Asim, esteemed (sometimes) poet, I 'SHOULDN'T', I suppose, but I DID agree with you on 'nose', SO 'here goes'. STANZA 7, line 2: I 'suggest': ...'lAsim, esteemed (sometimes) poet, I 'SHOULDN'T', I suppose, but I DID agree with you on 'nose', SO 'here goes'. (cont.)

(cont.) So, the poem's ants may have been IN, as well as ON, the poet's 'she'! ! ! 'Tee hee'? Couldn't/wouldn't ants be satisfied to hollow out rotting 'Mangoes' aka mangos? ? ? stanza 5: I like that you chose 'nostrils' over 'nose'. ;) bri

(cont. yet again!) : Now, assuming an ant could (or would want to) enter such an area in a woman's CROTCH region, they then might (at least try to) construct [[ NOT 'conduct']] 'tiny features. 'Lord preserve us! ! ' (cont.)

(cont.) [Therefore..] With the help of the internet, HERE is my interpretation, as SCARY as it MAY be to YOU! : 'Collar' refers to an abnormal(?) structure at/of the cervix aka the 'doorway' between a and a uterus. (cont.) us.

These two lines presented an intellectual challenge to me: 'Collar that once stood erect, now a park for these creatures, they built their hills and tunnels, conducting tiny features.' BUT I am smart and NOT without some medical experience. Therefore: (cont.)

(cont.) 'Definition of outfox: TRANSITIVE VERB informal Defeat or deceive (someone) by being more clever or cunning than they are; outwit. Definition of fox 1: NOUN 2 A cunning or sly person.'