Ant's Queue Comments

Aha. This is beautiful rich. I quite agree with Maia Padua on you. A poet with sharp perception of his surroundings you are. Marvellous portrayal.

The example of ants has a great bearing on the lives of human beings. We need to come out of that ants' queue syndrome. Thanks Sathya ji. No stopping; no looking back, no nerve to swerve and to rebel. Care not of what they can attain united when they retaliate.

This is written very beautifully...you have a theme in your mind...you tell that in your last lines...the 'ant' comparison you bring into is really striking...intelligent write...neat diction...10

This strikes me as a very spiritual work. On a personal level, I enjoyed it immensely! If I chose to change anything, it would be one word. The line, 'Heavens didn’t go down' would perhaps work better as 'Heavens didn't fall down' or perhaps, 'Heavens didn't collapse'. There's a bit of a double entendre to the phrase 'go down' that seems prevalent in English society, a subtle connotation that may be misconstrued. Minor nit-picking, of course... Again, I can't rave enough about the theme of this one, the need to step out of line and fight the injustices we see every day. Even though an ant is small, he can still lift ten times his weight and is so small he can infiltrate where large beasts cannot. Yet the struggle is universal; good men try to live in harmony, evil men strive to build a network of control meant to dehumanize. All in all, a valid analogy! I found it profound with dissatisfaction at the ant's complicity to the boot that grinds.

Interesting. Thanks for sharing. Nice use of words also. -Brie

i loved the personification and the use of figures of speech in ur poem.

interesting poem.thanks

Ants are fascinating, a very well observed poem, thanks, 10 Lynda xx

An 'ant cannot fight wild beasts”. But it can carry load beyond it's body-weight. It is a nice poem. Love it. 10+

a lesson for all of us they are soldiers to the core regards anju XX10

Ants may be very sall but thereare more ants than humans and the fire ant is the deadliest.But the mighty always trample the little ones until we learn compassion.

a beautiful prasa, great stanza,10

No stopping no looking back..... yes that must be the notto of our lives and with courage and hope we can survive in this world of today.......

You well present your argument although you couch it in free form you recognise he precedent become established as the norm the rich will take more than their share and thus the poor man goes without. If you expect life to be fair You are a fool I have no doubt. Injustice is the poor mans lot. Because the rich men make the laws They must protect what they have got Which is thought that gives me cause. to think perhaps the ants know more than men will give them credit for They do not exploit their own kind as do the tyrants of mankind

Ants have more discipline in their tribe than human beings. There are workers and queen in every group. They march like soldiers and fight when occasion calls for fighting. You have given a rich tribute to these ants.

If only the mighty human could learn from the insignifiant ant. A very original poem, thanks.

Love that poem. I give it a 10. If I could I would give it more. :)

They yearn to live, to survive As long as they can without strife.....injustice and apathy....fear....10 Very well done (Applause)

you have drawn a pathetic picture of lack of compassion in our society- the truth. we have become desensetised. some lines are really thought provoking. well penned. Ants, diligent, ignored- good philosophical insight.10

well thought and well penned sir! !