Friday, August 15, 2008

Angel Statues Comments

Rating: 5.0

Angel statues frozen in time,
As you hear a wedding chime,
Hearing the preacher mumble,
Faces of the statue crumble.
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Chris Newlash
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Wonderful poem..Keep writing..

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Kate Frost 19 June 2010

WOW. how can you write such a beautiful poem! ! I'm soo amazed!

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Kriss Hughes 17 October 2009

oh my goshh..your an awesome writer and i can relate to most of what you have written..i really like this one, its pretty. =D you seem like a really awesome person, too bad i dont know you.

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Alf Hutchison 19 June 2009

Chris this is poetry! ! ! ! regards Alf

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this is awesome... i like it! !

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Jay P. Narain 22 September 2008

Very nice poem. Never thought of statues like that. Great imagery.

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Joseph Tanner 21 September 2008

Yeah I like this poem, not one for reading much on ere... So it's nice to see a raw talent... My work not great at all but ya got something, with a lil tweaking you will be a great poet..I think that may come with age! lol

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Diana Kalitzin 21 September 2008

it is a very nice poem/scene - a metaphor for marriage.

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Alex Bowden 21 September 2008

It beautiful. I really like this. Its, wow. It's touching. I love it! Lol.

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Bless Villena 21 September 2008

i like it very much, its like a sad beautiful fairytale

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C H Sund 21 September 2008

Very nice, rhyming free verse. Your lines flow well and the abstract message gives many interpretations. Compliments to you.

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Ivor Hogg 20 September 2008

Hi chris as requested i read your angel statues. Open to many interpretations as you have readers i enjoyed the read as for technicalties you have a consistent rhyme pattern you chose to use rhyming couples whic is a good choice for waht I thin you are trying to convey. Howvever you inconsisten line lengths indicate a lack of meter.And interrupt the smooth flow of your words, May I suggest you aquire a good source book which will explain the different metres used in poetry Miller williams patterns of poetry is a good one You can pick up a used copy on amazon quite cheaply

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Dee Daffodil 20 September 2008

This is a thought provoking poem Chris! It makes one wonder why those statues are frozen in time. I also wonder about the connection to weddings. Perhaps there is an inference drawn between the deterioration of marriage when couples lose that which originally brought them together...do they in fact...turn to stone? ? Nicely done. Hugs, Dee

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Linda Moore 20 September 2008

Hi Chris, I like this very much, rhyming poetry is my personal favorite. You are talented and expressive......10

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Not a member No 3 20 September 2008

Chris, I think you have potential... and if you want to be a successful poet, read and write as much poetry as you can, and most important of all, don't be dissuaded by the judgements of others... perseverance is the key... all the great poets sweated over their work, often over a single word for hours or longer... and in some cases spent years working on a poem before they were satisfied with it.. I don't have that kind of discipline and could never be a poet, but maybe you could develop it... believe in yourself and much is possible.. nice effort.. jim

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Goldy Locks 20 September 2008

it's impactful, Chris, no doubt. gotta be honest, i'm not partial to the rhymes, especially every line. at 16, you have some marvelous insight. keep on ! ~~sjg

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Ashraful Musaddeq 20 September 2008

Marvelous rhyme, I love it and added my 10 to it.

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Wow. I love that poem. You kept my attention through the whole thing, and you can count on me reading some more of your work. It said a lot to me...more than I can explain. Definitly in my favorites and it gets a 10! Peace out, Lexi Baby

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Kirsten Gray 02 September 2008

soo pretty! and very well written this one has very nice ryhmes in it

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Kt Reynolds 20 August 2008

This poem is SO pretty! ! ! I luv it-kudosXOXO

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