James McLain

James McLain

From Tampa Florida And Still Living Near By
Friday, November 8, 2019

And As Your Teacher Watches You Comments

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and even as your 'teacher' watches 'you'
and your each drop that falls on me, your rain.
and i am tired and i am thirsty and it's only just apart.
and we are, as we now are, it is love and it is art.
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Bri Edwards 08 November 2019

2 – i'm certain this is very pornographic. therefore i like it! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! when do i get to meet your teacher? to MyPoemList, but i may not advertise this one. hmm? bri ;)

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Bri Edwards 08 November 2019

1 – line 2: i can't help wondering if you wanted " you're/you are" , not " your" . hmm? " golden breach" ? a little urinary leak? ? or sweat? i think " hunch" is a " guess" . i think you want to use " haunch" : Haunch: " 1. a buttock and thigh considered together, in a human or animal."

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James McLain

James McLain

From Tampa Florida And Still Living Near By
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