An Open Closet Comments

A good poem.You should read Constantinos Cavafis poems (1853-1933)

Tara, a lovely, rich-toned arrangement of alliterative action, textured imagery, and double-breasted, double implications. Bottom line is it's all woven with a velvety smooth vernacular. Oh, the paraphernalia of it all. Only a few minor flaws concerning this metaphorically embroidered ensemble, although it may been improved upon with slight alterations, and perhaps taken it at the seams. What? No mention of footware! Okay, that's enough of my silly word play. What I'm trying to say is that I very much love your style. Particularly these turns of phrases knocked my socks off: 'cat-eyed nemesis' as well as 'insanity of instant love' and the clever bit about the shrunken accoutrements being an impenetrable fortress. Brilliant, Ms. Teeling! Suggestions: L.1 change quandary to conumdrum; it merely sounds better, that's all. St.2 L.3 change wall flower to wallflower St.4 L.5 change discernable to discernible Can't remember where in the poem this appears, but earthy or earthly? Either one works I surmise. In any event, I doff my feathered fedora in your honour because I find myself SO liking the cut of your cloth. Respectfully, Greg