Thursday, April 17, 2008

An Ode To My Window Comments

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Dearest window,
You hold a view
Of images to taunt me forever.
Annoyances too many to
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David DeSantis
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Emancipation Planz 24 May 2008

A Ditty Ode to David De... Heartfelt fantasy... Laughter on transparency with a hammer I tap tap tap I need putty to frame this map

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Janice Windle 10 May 2008

Hahaha! you have me laughing my head off again David! 'I'd love to make a vase out of you'! - an item that will hold stuff, a container; something portable, that you can place wherever you wish to view it and through it! Not a flat, two dimensional transparent barrier that will present you with a stark view of what is always there, saying, 'take it or leave it, here is where you're at'! That is such a telling line to me. Even the window is male, the vase is female. Now I'm getting REALLY fanciful. Sorry. It's a great piece of DeSantis, David, and I agree that it is one of your best.

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Ben Gieske 26 April 2008

Enjoyable and amusing. This should eventually lead to something better. Keep on looking and imagination working. I like the ending and a few of your other thoughts about the window.

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Jurietta Duraan 25 April 2008

Excellent, Excellent poem, David...I see you have been busy...It has a lot of insight... a positive outcome for you perhaps, but not so postive for the window, no? Yummie stuff your poetry! Yuri*

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Lawrence S. Pertillar 25 April 2008

Nice work, David. I like this title, 'An Ode To My Window' What is viewed and how we perceive that or it with an appreciation is the key. Some choose to see sunlight. Others may have a preference to view only that which is before them being reflected. We inflict our own 'impressions'.

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Over and over in the same vein It is in your face that I’m forced to stare, Contemplating nothings while wishing for something, Fine imagery here

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Eric Frazier 23 April 2008

This is pretty well written and actually fairly funny. Or at least I got a laugh.

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Alison Cassidy 22 April 2008

What a fascinating poem about the difference between the promise and the reality. Yes, a window can be so much and yet, it can be nothing if the mind seeks melancholy. Love your reference to Megan (the unattainable) and your finale which adds the touch of humor to the piece to makes the seriousness of your angst more poignant. A light hearted musing with some depth beneath the froth. Excellent poem. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Flora Gillingham 21 April 2008

Window? You've got a window? This was a joy after reading the poignancy of A Funeral. You try to make out that you're a cynic, but you're a satirist and everybody knows that all satirists are romantics at heart! F

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R H 18 April 2008

Window of opportunity or shattered dream? At least it has given you the inspiration to write. The image of the 'cubicle rat' is very powerful - but I think your window on the world may provide further inspiration...j.

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Edwin Robinette 18 April 2008

Prisoner of the work cubicle.......this is great David! I'm getting to like your style!

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LOVEFOOL Aka 17 April 2008

Another cracking poem your stuff just gets better and better Nik

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