Friday, January 13, 2006

An Intimidated Poet Comments

Rating: 4.2

I lost my pen, love
it ran out of ink.
all I have left
is a pencil with
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Eila Mahima Jaipaul
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Beautifully painted. Captivating

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Kim Barney 10 November 2015

Lovely! No longer than it needed to be. Every word counts. Great job!

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Kay Staley 10 November 2015

how charming and lovely. One of the best non rhyming poems I have read in awhile. So simple and sweet.

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Souren Mondal 10 November 2015

A short yet brilliant poem.. The use of the pencil with 'chewed' eraser is beautiful...

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Rahman Henry 10 November 2015

Lovely poem, simple but a beauty that is capable to touch a reader

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M Asim Nehal 10 November 2015

Simple and powerful poem....on Life, on relationship and on everything it fits perfectly.

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Kenneth Maswabi 10 November 2015

Solid words on a short leash. This poem is full of confidence. I love it. Thank you.

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Joe Breunig 06 August 2006

An enjoyable poem; loved how the ending fit the poem's title.

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Indiscreet Episode 18 January 2006

I really like this one. Finding the right words does often feel impossible. How to capture somebody that means so much on paper?

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Ernestine Northover 13 January 2006

Oooohhhhh! that's a dodgy situation there Eila, I think breadcrumbs are supposed to work quite well as an eraser, though I've never tried it. Clever write indeed. Love Ernestine XXX

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Alice Vedral Rivera 13 January 2006

volumes in brevity avr

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Lori Boulard 13 January 2006

fantastic ending. Short but absolutely the right length for impact. Nice!

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Gina Onyemaechi 13 January 2006

...which you have done, Eila. Like Mr Shaffer says, so much meaning with so few, delightful words. A gem.

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Mary Nagy 13 January 2006

I really like this Eila! Very nice. Sincerely, mary

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Eric Paul Shaffer 13 January 2006

Eila, this is nice work. It is short, compact, and makes its point without a lot of extra words. In a poem like this, the very brevity of it forces the reader to make more of the words, and here that process is greatly rewarded. Good work.

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