Friday, September 14, 2012

An Extra-Marital Affair Comments

Rating: 3.5

As I laid spent on my bed one night
Like a snake crawled in sleep with might
Bearing promises of pleasure like a trove of treasure
Weary was I, that I let her seduce me and be sure
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Kareem Ayodejih Abeeb
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Bri Edwards 07 December 2013

pages and pages sounds good to me. i think b. aremu was fooled by the poem, though i confess that i at first was fooled until i got near the end. VERY clever and well-woven story. i hope you find time to let sleep stay a while longer some nights! thanks for sharing. and thanks for throwing me some rhymes! :) i will only take time to read and comment on this one poem now. but if there is/are one or two others you would particularly like me to review, please send me them or their titles.

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Stephen W 07 December 2013

Very funny! Not sure Pages and pages... is correct. Piles and piles...

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Babatunde Aremu 22 September 2012

Good poem. Adultery is a crime and must be dicouraged. Thanks for sharing

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