Sunday, March 15, 2009

An Essential Draft Comments

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a banyan tree trembles
its branches begin slowly
to grab sunken windmill
why all hope have gone?
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Ahmad Shiddiqi
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Rafique Farooqi 18 September 2009

an intelligent way of putting words, to get meanings...............well penned

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Rajkumar Mukherjee 17 May 2009

Dear Siddiqui, I feel I'm not eligible for such glowing tribute through your beautiful poem for the mankind. Coming back to the poem I must confess after a long time I had the opportunity to read such a poem with great imagery, nice rhythmic expression, metre and line break-ups. Basic questions are raised through trees, mountains and deer i.e plant, land and animal kingdom.; Why hope have gone? Why love have flown? and Why dreams have disappeared? You sought answers from five continents by paying great tributes to them as per their abundances.I can't resist my temptation to quote: thse lines where you excel: 'thare are no limit friend or foe blend into melody' 'there are no barrier love or hate blend into harmony' 'there are no block dream or reality blend into symphony' What a wish? Shall we call it the world as it could be made? Thanks for sharing such a thought-provoking poem. ----RAJKUMAR

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Jim Norausky 21 March 2009

unique and cleverly written. Jim

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Anthony Foster 15 March 2009

Well put together a good question posed

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Sandra Martyres 15 March 2009

Very imaginative poem

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Ahmad Shiddiqi

Ahmad Shiddiqi

Semarang, Central Java, Indonesia
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