An Early Night Comments

Beautiful. So down to Earth.

absolutely beautiful. Youre writing is a thrill to read. Lovely, sad, and profound to teh human psyche. Great work

Beautifully presented the crisis. Psychological depth is mingled with poetic experience..beautiful poem and enjoyable reading.

'Imagining some dire calamity' Rachel Ann Butler

And so the deception goes on but who is decieved him or her? ? ? good poem I like it a lot. Earthy stuff.

simple piece with a subtle twist. Very nice. get a 10.

Simple narrative transformed into quite an intriguing piece. Very clever, Mary

I take it further, I see it as the loneliness of waiting human affection, or even a turn of light in our life, yet we do not admit it to others, not even to ourselves...

a lie he would'nt believe even - anice narration of incidents-10

a poem typically feminine...and a lovely one in that...every line there makes you anxiously on the wait... and in the end a happy lie of the apprehensive mind...10+ for you, Mary

He should have said ' how to payback? yesterday you had an early night, but i swear, tomorrow will be from dusk to dawn...............'

...a fine expression indeed.........10

An interesting piece.10 for it.

Mary Mary meat me in Spain i shall arrive like a knight in the night: all man with no name, then, on the breath of a whisper i shall drive you insane

Not the most profound of sonnets, but very workmanlike, and a real change to have this form with a gently humorous touch. The rhymes are very natural, and a good rhythm too. Well done.

Nicely written, my wife would not be so forgiving! Perhaps false politeness breeds bad manners? Love from David

Very good poem Mary, you make most men feel guitly you know. Its factual and happening to most. Thanks

Mary Spain, What a beautiful poem written in a form that most of us on this site couldn't handle in a million years. And I love the theme - so understated and so timeless. Loved it. Welcome. Alison xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

This is a very touching narrative Mary. The manner that you have captured an incident such as the one described is truely majestical

Mary... The way you have used your words.. one can really picturise her waiting.... good work and very factual! ......10/10