An Attitude Of Ending Comments

I get the sense that the poem instead ends with 'last caress'. It may be difficult to change a rhyme once you've chosen it, hence the arts of modern poetry. I like the middle part though. The poem is surprisingly light considering the heavy themes. In that way, it is difficult to understand the meaning. But some of the images make clear that you are groping towards some sort of truth of inbetweens, perhaps not a dark truth. Maybe just ordinary existence, or something intellectual.

Interesting format, but the subject follows through making perfect sense. Read mine – Who Am I – Adeline

Your poem is very flowing, nice and smooth to read. Superb poem