An Attempt At Ars Poetica Comments
no rhyme
no rhythm
just fragmented thoughts
caught mid air in a net
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Poetry is a broad topic. Poetry is as large as the universe. I believe both Horace and Archibald MacLeish would consider this to be good poetry.
I liked it, waiting to read more by you Souren. I liked your diction.
Your first attempt is fantastic..........................10++++
This is brilliant. You inveigh against the anti-formalistic pretenses currently in vogue while illustrating your ability to implement those very precepts. It articulates the frustrations inherent to post-modernism. This is the poem of a poet who asks the pressing question: What is poetry? Well done, my friend.
Thanks Luc.. That is the basic question we need to ask ourselves.. It is a fundamental mistake when we try to distinguish between 'high art' and 'low art'.. Doesn't make any sense to me.. Art is art.. It is first and foremost, an expression of the artists' ideas..
You have shown an excellent ability to collect your fragmented thoughts and turn them into a fine composition. What starts as a revolt in heart becomes a touching expression so impressive. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
It is exactly the same spirit as you described that goes into a composition of a poem from me.. The thoughts are always there, it is just that there is a struggle to shape them into something that I can call a poem.. The only thing is, if someone asked me - 'What is a poem? ' - I would perhaps have no answers for that! ! And here lies the beauty of poetry..
Really a very wonderful poem read along with poet's note.Many times we throw away our writings thinking that they do not measure to be called poems.Alas, in that process so many poems are lost in the way.Self doubt regarding one's poetic skill affects many poets in initial stage.But you have made great strides both as a poet and as a critic in a short period.
It is due to the love and affection that my fellow poet members like you have shown to me that I have made whatever progress I have made.. Without this, the readers and the friends I have here, nothing would have possible.. Thank you for reading and appreciating my work Bharti.. It always means a lot :)
A successful experiment....poetry needs emotions the most...rhythm and rhyme comes after that.....thank you for sharing :)
Well and truly Abhilasha.. Feelings and thoughts are more important than prosody... Thanks for reading :)
Ah but you soon WILL have syllables and rhythm and the poetic tools locked down. The main stumbling block is always English pronunciation for second language poets Now we have howjsay for a good start. So glad you got to Carryl. He would inspire anyone to get organized and enjoy the art of poetry.
I hope so Wes.. But it will be there when I write on a topic that will require such 'restrain' or so.. But I do feel that writing the way I do is a little mad, 'though there is method in this madness....
This experimental poem is indeed a marvel. Poetry n art don't need any taming, nor do the poets n artists. That's the beauty of art. Freedom is at its root. The fragmented thoughts n words create wonders.10
To some extent yes, to some no.. The most important thing, I guess, is to understand that whatever happens, the taming should not end up in a compromise of ideas.. If that happens we, as poets, have lost..
just fragmented thoughts caught mid air in a net and bottled up in a cage where the circus ringmaster with a whip of whimsical arbitariness tames them down Splendid....... simply beautiful Souren! This taming is the most important thing in any art...... in poetry, in sculpture and hat not! Taming is what the potter and the black smith do! A 10+++++
Thank you Valsa ma'am.. All humans are capable of thinking, and I believe, they are capable of writing poetry too.. It is just most people find the work of taming down their thoughts too troublesome.. Once they start doing it, and keep practicing, poetry is bound to come out.
Well taming those words is an art, isn't it? for few comes naturally and few knows how to play with words and few are emotional. Words in any form and meter is appreciated as it comes from the dept of a heart. Love the way you express your thoughts Souren. Compleiments. and a well deserved 10++++
Thank you Arzoo.. That is key to poetry. It is not about rules of poetry, but having the heart in the right place.
This piece has grandfathered you, Souren. I wonder sometimes if you are my long lost little brother. Twelve joints might inspire many more poems but this one is a masterpiece of art, philosophy, intellect and literature. Very well done.
Thank you very much Kelly.. I feel the same.. Our skepticism, religious and political views, alongside our zest for Vodka, and perhaps a little cynicism covering our hurt selves at the miserable state of humanity are really signs of it.. If I ever met you someday, I am certain to have a discussion about life and a few beers down first before we talk poetry.. Thanks for being a companion in my poetic journey brother and friend..
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7/19/2025 3:11:34 AM # 1.0.0
I hate to say this given the poet's note about his own poem, but I liked how you wrote it, how you presented an idea about how poetry might be written and how it shouldn't be written. Yet I'm sure there were people who wanted to silence e e cummings for dribbling words down a page for visual impact a la a leaf falls done so much better his way. My personal progress is to read the classics, study the classics, try to write a poem like the classic and then sit down and write my way and watch the old and new blend together after a while and create a new thing of beauty.[if I am fortunate]