An Almost Broken Glass Bottle Comments

The more of my feelings I shoved into it the fuller my glass bottle got, the only problem is once I started to shove all my feeling into it, I didn't know how to stop...that's my fav line...nice job.

Well Miss M. that was an excellent metaphor and the poem was definitely captivating.Great Job! !

I love the metaphor of the glass bottle and shoving it inside of yourself. Trying to hide something see through inside of you, trying to protect yourself from being vulnerable which actually adds to your vunerabilty. It's so striking and stays with you after you read it. Really great job!

This is such a strong expression of pain, the bottle a perfect description and how you write to your loved one makes it so personal. I was honestly quite taken by how hard this grabbed me, i felt the pain strongly. I hope things improve for you, karen