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Interesting concept for a poem. Read mine - Frost Flowers - Adeline

I liked this one. Especially the end. A good rhythm and good rhymes. Also you missed the 'e' in careless. Just a typical typo. Also try and incorporate the poetic device assonance. Also just try and develop a perfect meter as some words don't go well with others like 'even' and 'though' as it provides awkwardness and disrupts the flow of the syllabic structure. All in all very good poem :) Keep penning brother, you have immense talent. Sincerely, Williams, T.

I really like how you had a good rhyme and rhythm to this, good job Keep writing! Cheers :)