Thursday, May 1, 2008

Amazement! Comments

Rating: 3.5

(I met Kabir)
This morning when in trance,
At my body I had a glance,
Me, its composition amazed,
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C. P. Sharma
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Gul naz 29 December 2009

great to read.........esp i liked the symbolism in ur poem

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Rani Turton 30 November 2009

'The world suddenly became alive, /It was at the Marine Drive.' I liked this poem and enjoyed the insertion of this line.

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Rachel Butler 20 September 2009

The bird inside cluttered and danced, Its all activities I glanced. Rachel Ann Butler

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Lady Grace 01 June 2009

very good to read.it is well penned..grace

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Lynda Robson 19 May 2009

A very enjoyable read CP, great imagery in this amazing piece, 10 Lynda xx

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Miriam Maia Padua 18 May 2009

very wholesome... lover of nature...of nature's gift... the gift of life... a very lovely poem displayed here... elements are wonderfully pictured out ...interesting write....thoughts are superbly described(as usual) 10+++

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Jacob Courtney 14 May 2009

very beautiful words. i could imagine this before my very eyes.

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Bonnie Collins 14 May 2009

This is written very good, and enjoyed the way you exucuted this.... Very nice feel. Bonnie

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Sandra Fowler 14 May 2009

A skillful use of rhyme and metaphor combine to produce a very fascinating piece.10, for your vivid experience. Warm regards, Sandra

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rago rago 14 May 2009

amazing is your writing........pancha boothangal and its value depicted in a beautiful way........kindly see my 10++

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Subroto Chatterjee 14 May 2009

Amazing...! ! Was it at Haji Ali on Marine Drive? ? Good metaphors & personification. IMAGINE... Cheers. Subroto

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Bob Blackwell 14 May 2009

Wonderful description of how all life is born. 10++

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Mamta Agarwal 14 May 2009

An intense moment of realization of perfection of human body, elements that bring it alive and a soul that gives nourishment. in amazement you looked. great write, inspired by Sufi poet Kabir. it has the same depth as his couplets.10++ THanks Regards Mamta

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Lalitha iyer 14 May 2009

Very nice introspection. Beautiful reflection.

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Paul Hansford 14 May 2009

It is always difficult, in writing a poem as strictly rhymed as this, to make the rhymes natural. There are also a couple of rather awkward inversions - 'Me, its composition amazed' is not what we would normally say. But, having said that, this is an interesting and thoughtful poem, and keeps up its image all through.

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Andrew Blakemore 14 May 2009

And so the life bird was free to fly- great imagery. Best wishes, Andrew

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Ramesh T A 14 May 2009

Truth revealing imagery in the poem makes it amazing! Soul is indeed a fluttering bird in the cage for all! Indeed a wonderful composition, friend!

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Naidz Ladia 14 May 2009

if this is a food, this is a very nice delicacy...but since this is poetry, my gosh, , , this is excellent...naizz

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Vidyadhar Durgekar 13 May 2009

Amazing composition....................10

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Florence P. Wordsmith 09 February 2009

It warms my heart to know that others think about these things too!

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C. P. Sharma

C. P. Sharma

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