(I met Kabir)
This morning when in trance,
At my body I had a glance,
Me, its composition amazed,
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'The world suddenly became alive, /It was at the Marine Drive.' I liked this poem and enjoyed the insertion of this line.
The bird inside cluttered and danced, Its all activities I glanced. Rachel Ann Butler
A very enjoyable read CP, great imagery in this amazing piece, 10 Lynda xx
very wholesome... lover of nature...of nature's gift... the gift of life... a very lovely poem displayed here... elements are wonderfully pictured out ...interesting write....thoughts are superbly described(as usual) 10+++
very beautiful words. i could imagine this before my very eyes.
This is written very good, and enjoyed the way you exucuted this.... Very nice feel. Bonnie
A skillful use of rhyme and metaphor combine to produce a very fascinating piece.10, for your vivid experience. Warm regards, Sandra
amazing is your writing........pancha boothangal and its value depicted in a beautiful way........kindly see my 10++
Amazing...! ! Was it at Haji Ali on Marine Drive? ? Good metaphors & personification. IMAGINE... Cheers. Subroto
An intense moment of realization of perfection of human body, elements that bring it alive and a soul that gives nourishment. in amazement you looked. great write, inspired by Sufi poet Kabir. it has the same depth as his couplets.10++ THanks Regards Mamta
It is always difficult, in writing a poem as strictly rhymed as this, to make the rhymes natural. There are also a couple of rather awkward inversions - 'Me, its composition amazed' is not what we would normally say. But, having said that, this is an interesting and thoughtful poem, and keeps up its image all through.
And so the life bird was free to fly- great imagery. Best wishes, Andrew
Truth revealing imagery in the poem makes it amazing! Soul is indeed a fluttering bird in the cage for all! Indeed a wonderful composition, friend!
if this is a food, this is a very nice delicacy...but since this is poetry, my gosh, , , this is excellent...naizz
It warms my heart to know that others think about these things too!
great to read.........esp i liked the symbolism in ur poem