Sunday, September 7, 2008

Am I Bothered? Comments

Rating: 5.0

Carried on the carefree bed to the seventh heaven
With my arms and legs ajar
Do I seem bothered by you?
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Kobby King
COMMENTS
Max Luther 14 September 2008

wow this is incredibly ellegant.

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Fay Slimm 10 September 2008

I like this. It has some good phrasing, even better alliteration. Do keep writing. A ten from me. best wishes from Fay.

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Stephanie Fiddy 09 September 2008

Wow very nice! ! ! ! ! ! ! :)

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