Aloud Comments

very nice.short and to the point.liked it.

Perhaps he is tongue tied in your presence

lapses of an eager heart... ....................................... Clever and warm poem... 10..... Tsira

Unique imagery in your first two lines alone had me engrossed, and I was right to be so..... t x

superb work................well penned

Unique use of metaphor. I like what you see from your own personal window on the world. Excellent work. Warm regards, Sandra

Moving and as someone else has said, a little anguished. You describe so well the disturbing sense that a lover is holding back the very words that would make you trust, and so making you mistrust, perhaps because they don't trust themselves.

These candy words are a little told a little untold. As regards the usual, the style is a little different: dry, mature, anguished. How the first poems are far! However how the past returns in these dynamics! PH is changing, many things are vanishing, Mrs. Avelar always deserves our regard and our affection

Very pretty presentation of how an ordinary occurrence can somehow become illuminated in our minds. The final 3 lines are blinding, the imagery of vapourising is superb! Love it Onelia. HG: -) xx

Wow, a dramatically captured state of mind with heart in it. CP

nice poem to fall back upon again and again and the more you read it aloud the more silently it pervades one's sensibility. liked it very much...

very nice poem, i loved it truely.

Lovely ONe.. tis like chewing watermelon flavoured bubblegum... you can't help but work your tongue to seek the formation of the biggest bubble.. out.. then POP... loud and clear.. you do it over.. aroha xx