All The Trees Comments

(cont.) IF YOU ARE SPEAKING OF PARTICULAR BIRDS & particular trees, e.g. one pair of orioles which return to the same tree for nesting year after year, THEN I'd call it symbiosis. : ) bri

(CONT.) symbiosis (a symbiotic relationship) : 1 - A close, prolonged association between two or more different organisms of different species that may, but does not necessarily, benefit each member.' (cont.)

Your use of birds and tree(s) here is clever, but could be MORE clear. Their relationship may or may not be symbiotic (using first definition I supplied in a comment) . (CONT.)

(cont.) Does 'their travels' refer to the flights of the birds OR to the 'flights/longings' of the tree(s) , ...OR TO BOTH? ? And i would use 'dears', not 'dear'. : ) bri four stars ****

(cont.) Again (in last stanza) it is NOT clear to me who/what you are referring to. Is the one on the throne (later 'I' & 'my') ...[[ I may have typed 'thrown' earlier; oops ]]... a tree or YOU, the poet, (or other human) ? (cont.)

(cont.) Using 'thrown' is a bit of a 'reach' for a rhyme, but, hey, it works well enough and IS a 'nice' rhyme. (cont.)

Your Poet's Notes, which I only noticed and read after the poem was read, IS helpful. Thanks, but it would be better (many times) if Notes were not 'needed' for understanding a poem. (cont.)

(cont.) Of course, even in a poem with NO symbolism, a poem may not be clear to me in its meaning, which makes for less enjoyment on my part. (cont.)

last stanza: unclear to me; symbolism is 'not my bag' aka not my preference in my poems or in others I read. Other readers will 'eat it up' aka enjoy it. (cont.)

'In this symbiotic dance, a tale of nature's flow, Revealing secrets hidden, the mysteries they bestow.' As I commented yesterday, I like the flow, rhyming, and topic(s) , but these 2 lines aren't as clear as I'd like to read. Perhaps expand on them?

'The birds that grace their boughs, fleeting visitors of delight, Stir envy within the trees, longing for their flight, ' I THINK the 'trees' are longing for THEIR 'flight', BUT it COULD be the 'birds' which Luke refers to. : )

symbiosis: 1 - A close, prolonged association between two or more different organisms of different species that may, but does not necessarily, benefit each member. 2 - A relationship of mutual benefit or dependence. 3 - Union for life of certain organisms, each of which is necessary to the other

Oh! I KNOW I started to read this one yesterday. I may have even finished reading it yesterday. Now I have for sure. I like the flow and topic(s) and rhyming. Another meal has once again interrupted me! ! : ) bri

I haven't even finished reading your poem, but think I'll save it for another day. You may remind me if you wish to (do so) . I did already read your PH bio and send you a message about that. bri : )