All The Sparrows Have Gone Comments

Beautiful poem Jasmine.. Loved reading it.

i always appreciate a note from a poet, even though it doesn't always aid my understanding. look at the last word in your note..... oops! i like rhyming (though the 70 year old i told you about in arizona, a state in usa, seems to dislike rhyming) . so thanks for the rhymes. i would change the wording of the first two lines to make the rhyme either stone/groan or stones/groans. it just sounds better to me. no big deal though. whose hearts turned to stone? hearts of humans going or not going to the park? or the hearts of sparrows? ? ? did people stop going the park because the sparrows left? ? and whose soul is alone? i hope my comment doesn't seem TOO negative. i like.... chiming laughter! thanks for sharing.

sparrows have taken flight.....! ! You may relate to my poem A pair of sparrow on my lovely lemon tree! !

This is so beautiful, just perfect, love it! !

A great poem, like it, a great write.

lovely poem...u write well...imaginative and soulful a simple charming and neat poem...liked it cheers