Akimbo Comments

...totally agree with the peers, superb write

I don't know about anybody else, but this reminded me of a Faulkner stream of consciouness. Like the line, 'you so badly broke my heart the scars / won't heal.' I would of broken that line off with the word 'heart, ' but you just kept on going, as if a pause was not needed. I think that takes a certain boldness, to make it work in the end.

This poem rates my 10+ for a poetic superhero.

'with hips like a skydiving elvis', a bit jealous I didnt come up with that line. Good work.

Well this is just very well done. An even-tempered and barely concealed anger combined with an atmospheric feeling of time passing in the form of dresses that no longer fit. Terrific title too.

A great poem, Jake, a lovely group of poems today, but this one is touching!

profound really. I dunno what else to say.

Excellent AJ, A forrage amonst the low points of relationships, in which, as I understand it, we sometimes tend to forget other things outside of 'us'. The structure is excellent and seems to portray indeciviness and irritation as if they were one and the same thing, inducing apathy. Though I would not think that apathy played any part in this compositition. Many regards Denis Joe