Agony Comments

An amazing poem crafted in a unique style. Kitchen is personified. Tirelessly cooking tobacco related foods: tobacco chutney, tobacco curry, tobacco biryani….so on so forth. Then let me quote: “..Her heart despite its rapidness Awaiting patiently her lover Who's been chained to her delicious cooking” ‘Agony’ is a voice of the kitchen against people increasingly getting intoxicated with high spices replacing the lady kitchen with her male counterpart. Though the poem is a bit philosophical, but very precise with a significant message…Appreciated. Regards

A beautiful poem with such beautiful imaginations and socially relevant also against tobacco.

Very funny, very ironic and really wonderful composition.......tobbaco chutny, that is what people are eating by the name Gutka etc................

This is a wonderful imaginative poem! I love the tongue in cheek humor of the recipes while giving a jab to smoking. Very witty, but also displays real emotion. It's a very difficult balancing act to put humor and real emotion in one poem, but you manage it admirably. My favorite lines (even though there is confusion with the use of 'her' in the last stanza three times, perhaps change last one to 'this delicious cooking') 'Under the wildly running fan rests..........(wildly twice this close together decreases effectiveness) Wildly coughing out.................(this wildly works the best, maybe first one could use 'frantic' or?) Her heart despite its rapidness Awaiting patiently her lover........(corrected spelling) Who's been chained to her delicious cooking.' Only other problem and it's tiny is in first stanza 'Musterd' should be mustard. Since I cannot PM-email you through here, I also wanted to thank you for reading my poem 'From the Stone Cut' and commenting. I wish you would allow email because usually I would email about any spelling or other problems I find rather than here. It seems more polite.

Her heart despite its rapidness Awainting patiently her lover Who's been chained to her delicious cooking .. so all preparation for cheely lover. hmmm good thought presented in poem.. lovely write read mine n separate ways. m yes to to and you go alone

I feel the pain of waiting the person we love in your poem. Its not the tiresome of the preparation but the effort with love in waiting. Nice poem keep the good work.

wow! ! a brilliant imagination! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

Dear Indira, A splendid poem potraying The agony of the soul waiting For its beloved - Willing To walk the extra mile To make him smile And be by your side The agony of a soul Willing to die passively Alongwith the beloved Hoping the chains that shacle Will one day break and Life will be become smoke free! Angel

The Agony of waiting expressed in this poem is mystifying as well Is the tobacco based food the final lure? ? Really an original piece 10++

Akka Indira! is it REAL......... THESE tobacco recipes! ! came accross for the first time in my life. And coming from your cupboard of WISDOM, Would BLINDLY believe in it all......... And try to prepare them at my earliest! ! ! i posted my DEBUT poemS on this site today! Shall feel BLESSED for your gracious VISIT :) - thanbi.Shree

I feel I dive into Indian Tandoori Culinary Ocean. wow! very interesting! tasteful and spicy! Pablo Neruda ever wrote also Ode to Salt. (dear, friend. if time permits. please read and comment on my new poems on page 1 and 2. thank you) .

All good recipes, as also in a poem, needs good digestion, by one's with a tasteful palat and appreciativeness of the poem. Mmmm, mmmm, mmm good poem! God bless the poet that can concoct, with a talented ease-MJG.

Tobacco chutney! ? ...i would have preferred tomato chutney...tobacco or tomato...the poem has been cooked fine...good tobacco recipe, Indira...well, who is coughing, out there? 10

Tobacco here tobacoo there tobacco everywhere.................... wonderful tobacco poem i am intoxicated..............

A unique poem here Indira, I enjoyed reading it, hope he enjoyed all that tobacco, 10 Lynda xx