Monday, January 26, 2015

After Comments

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I wait the morning.
The light that robs me of night.
Its stealth, creeping uphill,
entering private space
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Suzy Jay
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Fabrizio Frosini 26 January 2015

a few misspellings, I see.. f.i.: 'crescendo' and 'kalashnikov'. And your last stanza begins with ''To sing with sparrows'', that is the same line in the previous stanza.. Maybe a not-wanted repetition.. Is it? Is it a poem from the Sierra? Ciao Fabrizio

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