Afflicted Comments

One can't but help how once you felt to rise and never fall. To rise and never fall you gave your all.. iip

wow Deb this is such a very nice heartfelt poem...you have drawn me to your words. I felt all the sadness and pain here...your vividness have magical way to touch ones heart.......OMG you made me cried! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! 10++++++++++

touching! ! ! ! ! ! very touching! ! !

This is (generally speaking) a well-wrought composition, Deborah. There is power in many lines. I hope you didn't personally have to undergo all this. Well, if you did, you at least came out of it with a good poem. Whoever the man was is not worth a fine woman's time, assuming the portrait is an accurate one.

Deborah, after reading this poem I have come to two conclusions, either you have written this expressing what you yourself had to endure or you know someone who has gone through such horrible pain. Either way, this is why I love poetry with all of my heart. It allows a person to paint with words their thoughts and emotions providing a release that they may not otherwise have. For poets, our work is composed in our own little worlds where we are safe and have a sanctuary to retreat to in our minds. This was an incredibly powerful poem and I would love to read another piece by you that expresses light at the end of this very dark tunnel of abuse. I say this because women who are currently in this situation can read this piece and feel that they are understood and it will bring them comfort. Then in reading another piece that demonstrates the power of action that they hold in order to change their circumstance can maybe inspire them to take a stand against this type of abuse and know that they don't have to live like this any longer. Very powerful poem.

Your poem is so graphic, so vivid. It's sad and beautiful. Only a few people can pull that off. I love it, you truly captured all of the feelings women feel when physically abused.

I hope the guy that hurt you learns a lesson and you deserve better

A very graphic piece of work Deborah containing powerful images. Best wishes, Andrew

a tender love and a passionate kiss only for few can be a bliss a fool shall blow it all away without realising , along the way happilly merrily and in a manner cognizant shall learn someday but not untill its too late to repent not for all your love and care let it be exclusive and rare not to be frittered away, the pearls of your treasure only a few deserve this pleasure only a few deserve this pleasure

Abuse of any kind should be forbidden but it is all too common.Your raises awareness of spouse abuse. ten

i luv the way u describe everything! amazing imagery

Debrah, I don't remember if u said if this was a true story or not, but i am glad to hear that you are happy and safe now. Thank you, Melanie

Good write 10s..........................

This was amazing! ...Thanks for the request! ...It was worth it! ! ' <33Payyton

Wow....this is amazing. And I can definitly relate to it in a different way than being hit or beaten :) Good Job.