Addiction (Yet To Be Rebroken) Comments

Could you tell us a little about yourself? What past experiances shaped who you are today?

'It shatters the heart that you have failed them And that everything they were ever proud of you for Has died and left them feeling lost' Shatters whose heart? And that....what? This is poor English for which there is no justifying reason. The thought can and should be expressed more succintly and without changing from a singular to a plural subject. In fact, you could leave out lines 2 through 9 and the poem would improve. When you are speaking directly, the poem flows quite well.

I to can feel your pain, I have felt it from sides, so I understand. In this world of ours given time everything changes. I was once lost but I found myself and changed.

Lady.. take a breathe and live............ for live.......... live. hey. this is good stuff.

I can feel the pain and suffering while reading this. At least you leave some room for hope of a better future.

The water washed away the footsteps wow, amazing line, i have been there and back and what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger and makes for great poetry. steve

jeez Jay, Jay......i'm so sorry....: (......such a passionate....sad poem......beautiful and yet such a tear jerker.... 10++

hi jess your exaspiration and anguish goes blink ers like a beacon its so sad...its like looking at a dear one slip into a quicksand while you stand by...unable, , , helpless...only a faint hope to give you solace very touching and paiful lines... iv experienced it up close...and can well identify with your feeelings of holoowness... great [poetry cheers

wow. very heartful. an addiction is normally strong, you forget about what's really important and hurt the people you love through the mistakes that are made. but, normally the love of somebody being there is stronger to keep fighting the fight to get better.

Very elusively spoken, but your theme of addiction resonates clearly throughout... it is truly a moving, heartfelt piece and I can feel that. I can feel the suffocation of destruction - the isolation. I can relate to it on a certain level and understand your pain... I think I'll favourite this. Thank you, Jessica Robert.