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terrific insight...keep up the good work...Jeff.

making a poem in mostly rhyming couplets i think hinders the poem's expression... the form needs more freedom, especially to fit with the theme about being 'free' which is the climactic exclamation at the end. i think you'll find rhyming, unless it is brilliant and unpredictable detracts from making as powerful a point as desired...but not bad...try rewriting it without end rhymes...

wow again a verrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrry sweet poem from my best poetry friend... like it 10/1o and you are much talented... hope your soul feels my peace dreaming thoughts tooo

Many like that today. You speak for them well.