Action Figure (C) 10-2-09 Comments

This, sir, I call a poem. Oustanding and full of human insight. thank you

I like how you gave human emotion to the action figure as the poem progressed. Love the concept, something refreshing and different for a change.10/10

Lots of interesting ideas thread their way through this poem. You've used the rhyming pattern to order the thoughts which gives them a lot of power. Great images transmitted.

I like this -good job! !

A great piece of work Corey which says a lot about our society today...Keep writing.

I think what you are trying to tell me Is that you are not happy with your life And that you are struggling with many things