Thursday, May 18, 2006

Acting Selfishly Comments

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How did it ever happen?
How could i not see?
That all the while i was acting selfishly
Wanting more, wanting to be free
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Guarded Heart
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Brian Dorn 18 May 2006

Guarded Heart, a moving and stirring write about selfish intentions and culminating in a moment of redemption. Nicely done! ! Brian

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Rosemary Du Preez 18 May 2006

This is a sad tale told. The poem has great potential but I would consider a slight revision to ease the flow but then I may just be reading it wrong. It is truly beautiful and allows the reader into your head and heart. Well written. Rosemary

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Guarded Heart

Guarded Heart

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