Monday, August 3, 2009

Act Iii: Genesis Comments

Rating: 5.0

The new solution sleeps within the vial,
it's song drips like the tentacles of the sun.
Still alone in this dome, waving to creation
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Lawrence S. Pertillar 03 August 2009

Your line usage is very vivid. 'And so I lay dying in a punctured chariot' is so depictive. In fact, the entire last stanza of your poem is classic stuff. You are a remarkable writer. I appreciate your talent(s) . Great job. ~LSP~

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