Friday, August 21, 2020

A Year Together In Love Comments

Rating: 5.0

Paramount to every other things
Two souls on a romantic routine
A seed found to be nurtured
Sprouting into a gorgeous creature
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Denis Mair 21 August 2020

Wonderfully fresh lines. I like your playful rhyme of DAHLIA with CALENDAR. I also like the line IT'S PROUDLY A YEAR AND YOU FORGOT ME NOT. And I can see a cuckoo clock in these lines: A WAR BETWEEN HEARTS AND EMOTIONS/ THROUGH TWELVE SOLDIERS ON MOTIONS. I suggest a change: THROUGH TWELVE SOLDIERS IN ROTARY MOTIONS.

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